Jenisser part 2

1. 2016-08-21 at 8:11 AM UTC

   #1
   

   kroz weak whyte, frothy cuck, and former twink
   
   
   My cat shoved me a man-made crystal several months after what happened to jenniser. I brought it
   over to the location where I found her, after having several shots of whiskey and an oxycodone. I sat there
   until the sun started to set.
   
   I didn't really see much with the crystal except a few ghost of a bullet pass by, or rods, what ever they were.
   I saw a mother walk up with her young son, probably 3 years old, and lay down on the grass yards away from me, then I saw
   a tall hue sway slowly and then gently lay down next to the woman and her child. I'm guessing it was either the childs
   sibling or father.
   
   
   
   I layed down there and watched it for a while and then I saw several shadows surround the hue laying around the mother and child
   and the hue walked off with the shadows.
   
   I left after that because I think something else happened to Jenniser that wasn't so cut and dry. Or maybe it just takes a while to be ushered off.
   
   
   
   
2. 2016-08-21 at 11:34 AM UTC

   #2
   The Self Taught Man Black Hole
   Dogshit.
3. 2016-08-21 at 7:52 PM UTC

   #3
   

   kroz weak whyte, frothy cuck, and former twink
   ^yeah thats not what your mutta said last night when I read it to her in bed.
   
   
4. 2016-08-22 at 2:04 PM UTC

   #4
   The Self Taught Man Black Hole
   The universe hates you. I was just typing a post explaining to you why I would never consider writing a fair critique of this garbage but then my phone went into "fuck you, charge me"-mode and yeah.
   
   Summary:
   
   Wack ass shit first sentence.
   Bad bad "cliff hanger" because part 1 didn't end with any sort of tension and didn't make me, the reader, interested in finding out what happened/is about to happen to the characters.
   If your idea of character is to write that the bitch did an oxy and a shot, I'll slap the shit out of you and honestly, it speaks volumes about your view of women in general.
   
   You will never accomplish anything as a writer. Stop insulting the craft and never touch a keyboard again you barely literate mongoloid.
5. 2016-08-22 at 6:40 PM UTC

   #5
   

   kroz weak whyte, frothy cuck, and former twink
   Lol quit white knighting you loser, plenty of women are drug addicts, just talk to "hydromorphone".. Just because I chose to touch on real human issues, you become a piss pant instantly. And my style of writing isn't Stephen king or dean koontz. I'm more on par with Bukowski or Jay Randall. You plebe.
6. 2016-08-22 at 7:17 PM UTC

   #6
   

   Sophie Pedophile Tech Support

   Lol quit white knighting you loser, plenty of women are drug addicts, just talk to "hydromorphone".. Just because I chose to touch on real human issues, you become a piss pant instantly. And my style of writing isn't Stephen king or dean koontz. I'm more on par with Bukowski or Jay Randall. You plebe.

   
   [greentext]>on par with Bukowski or Jay Randall[/greentext]
   
   Sounds legit.
7. 2016-08-23 at 2:06 AM UTC

   #7
   The Self Taught Man Black Hole
   that was a real Zongo of a story bruhloni sandwich.
8. 2016-08-23 at 8:45 AM UTC

   #8
   The Self Taught Man Black Hole
   I was the one who told you to add reasonable characteristics to your character and all you do is making her a drug slut. With a sloppy half assed sentence. Weak. I don't give a fuck about women. The naked chick in your first story. Did she just, like, walk home and chill after seeing her friend's gruesome murder until her cat shoved her a magic crystal?
   
   "touch on real human issues"
   
   Are you retarded?
   
   Yes, absolutely. 100%. You are definitely on par with Bukowski, no question....