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    kroz weak whyte, frothy cuck, and former twink
    Jenniser and I have been friends for a few months now after I we both moved into a house with her and another girl.
    While going to college.
    I never had a lesbian experience before until I met her. One night, i was just laying in bed listening to music when jenniser
    walked in it tottally caught me by surprise considering I was just wearing my bra and panties.. she could tell I was startled and told me
    to calm down its not a big deal.. She asked if I wanted to drink and I said sure... We drank several shots of whiskey together and stayed up talking
    I ent up going with her to her room and slept with her in her bed.
    In the morning I got up because I had to get ready for school and when I walked out of her room in just a bra and thong our other
    roomie happened to already be up and saw me.. It was kind of awkward but whatever.. We ent up having sex and sleeping with eachother
    every night.

    Something about it was just right and very natural, so we just went with it. We loved each other and definitely had a lot of fun.

    Our other roomie didn't like it.. she eventually moved out, so it was whatever... I really loved her a lot.

    One night we decided to go out, smoke and skinny dip at the lake in a secluded area.
    We parked by the water, smoked and undressed. We left our clothes in the car and walked bare out to the water. It felt great
    outside this night.

    We swam around enjoying ourselves for a good thirty minutes or so, and she told me she was going to walk back up to the car
    to get the pipe and bud. I will admit it was kind of creepy at that time of hour being naked in the lake alone,
    she didn't seem to mind just walking off like that alone, the car was parked at least a 100 yards away..

    Anyways I waited around and I started getting even more nervous because she was taking along time and not back yet. I called out
    for her but heard no reply, just the eery atmospheric noises of the night.. that coupled with my paranoia was starting
    to get the best of me.

    I really started freaking out and got out of the water and started running to the car.. It was gone.. what the hell is going
    on? I broke down into tears, I just didn't understand what was happening, she would never do this to me.
    I started screaming for her and pacing around the area.

    I turned around and saw her body hanging from a tree, enough moonlight was on her that I could see her obviously lifeless
    body just swaying in softly in the breeze. I started screaming in sheer terror, she had no eyes.. what happened to
    her eyes? Just tears of blood dripping from her lonely eye sockets. It was horrible, but in a way she was still beautiful
    because she had been mine.

    I will always love, Jenniser.







    Doug Mcgregor is an american sci-fi author from Austin texas. He was born in 1987 and still currently resides in Austin with his second cat, Archer.
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    aldra JIDF Controlled Opposition
    at work, was terrified to scroll down
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    Sophie Pedophile Tech Support
    Please write a pedo literotica next. Here are some pointers:

    The girl has to be between 4 and 11, she has to be related to our protagonist somehow(little sister, cousin, niece), no rape or coercion, the girl has to be innocent but curious about da benis and sex in general. Actual intercourse is not a requirement, i'll leave the rest up to your imagination.

    GO GO GO
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    kroz weak whyte, frothy cuck, and former twink
    Please write a pedo literotica next. Here are some pointers:

    The girl has to be between 4 and 11, she has to be related to our protagonist somehow(little sister, cousin, niece), no rape or coercion, the girl has to be innocent but curious about da benis and sex in general. Actual intercourse is not a requirement, i'll leave the rest up to your imagination.

    GO GO GO


    Actually I seriously considered doing that, but yeah I know very little on the subject even more than I do about lesbos. But yeah thanks for the tips. I'm trying to be an edgy sci-fi/horror erotic novelist.

    I watched 50 shades of gray last night for the first time and loved it.
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    Pronounced "Jess E Ayy", That was a good little diddy you wrote there.

    I have been trying to get back into writing and I find this website VERY helpful, maybe you will too.
    http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/BodyHorror

    http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/BloodyHorror
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    kroz weak whyte, frothy cuck, and former twink
    ^thanks man, Yeah I've been taking adderall and reading a lot lately to help me write better. It feels good man
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    http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/SciFiHorror

    http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/NightmareFuel

    The nightmare fuel one is great for ideas.
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    kroz weak whyte, frothy cuck, and former twink
    ^rad never heard of that stuff before.
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    Your last name isn't Mcgregor but that last part made me laugh.

    Very cliche ending, though. "Tears of blood tripping from her lonely eye sockets" and "in a way it was still beautiful because she had been mine"... no, that doesn't work for a naked bitch that just witnessed the murder of her friend. I know a short story like that doesn't allow any truly developed characters but you tried to infuse some kind of poetic characteristics into a character that could clearly not possess them. That is weak writing. You tried too hard.

    That is an advice, no attack.
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    kroz weak whyte, frothy cuck, and former twink
    ^well thanks, it's better than your critique on my last story. And yes I'm very aware the ending was cliche', thats what I was going for.. And that I have to workout some of the kinks. But like I mentioned my story was inspired from watching fifty shades of grey and reading some of the book. So... yeah.. and I belted out that story in like 15 minutes.... because I knew that if I didn't just belt out and idea real quick on paper, I was going to get distracted and end up masturbating instead.

    I ent up listening to music and masturbating for like 8 hours after that.

    But I'll tell you what riser, my writing might be weak, but on the stims my pussy game gets way more intense, I had 3 girls wanting to sleep with me last night. I only went with one though. I'm pretty sure she thought I was crazy when she actually made it over... Breakin' hearts and bustin hymens! Thats how I roll fam! derpadew!

    But anyways, do you write riser?

    And who's your favorite author? Mines phillip k dick. And I'm also into reading the sci-fi zine interzone, with a lot lesser known guys.
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    I write quite a lot. Most of it are shitposts on this very forum so you are probably familiar with my literary body of work.

    Yea, I know a bit about literature and writing. I don't really have a favorite, though. Maybe the dude in my avatar. He was kinda good. Nietzsche for carrying the torch and delivering a similar message. His structure was unreal, too. I like many writers.

    I'll post a video you have to listen to if you want to hear some really outstanding short stories by David Foster Wallace. He is one of my favorites for sure. Phillip K. Dick was a beast, too but I'm that much into sci-fi.
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    This shit gets me every time. I'm really sad that he killed himself. I think it is the last story in this video that will really fuck your guts and change your life forever. At least that's what it did to me. Holy shit.
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    "Incarnation of burned children" starts at the 30 minute mark. I can't describe that shit but every time I listen to it I get a slight panic attack.
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    kroz weak whyte, frothy cuck, and former twink
    "Incarnation of burned children" starts at the 30 minute mark. I can't describe that shit but every time I listen to it I get a slight panic attack.


    Yeah it was pretty disturbing, It's not the usual kind of style I read, but It's something to look into, I will prolly check out the other stories.

    I like robert heinlein , and yeah his writing is pretty simple but it packs a punch and has a message.

    I also read the zine "poetry" thats been being issued since 1912

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    One of my alts at the other sites was "Horatio Abernathy". ;)
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    kroz weak whyte, frothy cuck, and former twink
    ^ I don't get the reference
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    Use the Google?

    A fictional Nobel Prize winner in "Time for the Stars".

    "Horatio Abernathy [mentioned in passing] Nobel Prize laureate in field theory. He measured the speed of telepathy to demonstrate that it was not limited to the speed of light, nor did it obey the inverse-square law."
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    kroz weak whyte, frothy cuck, and former twink
    I used the google and nothing came up.. but yeah... k ...

    edit: one thing did , I guess it was one of heinlens characters
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